| 大垪和や 棚田の夕日 ココにある  My Home Ohaga ! sunset in the rice terraces all here |
| aki fukashi 秋深し  autumn deepens - my spider still weaves sunbeams  |
| Harbour Tower  Harbour Tower - autumn crowds enjoying autumn clouds |
 winter shadows - my glass is still half full   |
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 clear water of autumn - counting shadows counting fish   |
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Join me on a slide show of Lake Okutsu .
(36 photos)
Slide Show, take your time to enjoy!
Water clears (mizu sumu) Water in Autumn (aki no mizu)
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Gabi
the first haiku in particular is just wonderful!
I couldn't resist sharing it with my esperantist friends:
aŭtuna lumo klara
nombranta ombrojn
nombranta fiŝojn
tr. Darlington
Hajko en Esperanto
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Read my Haiku Archives 2007
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 autumn walk ... each leaf shows a different face  |
 autumn colors - I remember mother's favorite quilt  ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo  |
 chrysanthemum dew - I sip a bit of long life |
| Sunshine the whole day, but the days are getting shorter. In the early evening a cold wind takes over. We have to be early for our daily valley watch. And sometimes we have this pleasant surprise at the bottom ... autumn evening - the lingering warmth of this old deck chair |
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CLICK for Sanyo Shinbun Newspaper Article.
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A friend has commented:
Nice one, Gabi.
Do you need the dash?
Good question, indeed I do.
Coming from a traditional Japanese haiku background, I am used to a kireji, a cut marker, which is visible in Japanese and a cherished ingredient in traditional haiku.
Right now, NHK is featuring a session of 24 lessons within two years about the CUT and the CUT MARKERS!
You might read more about it here
http://haikutopics.blogspot.com/2006/06/kireji.html
I try to keep the three requirements for a traditional Japanese haiku
5-7-5 (make this short long short in English)
one season word (kigo) and
one cut marker.
kire 切 means CUT
kireji 切字 means CUT MARKER
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| 山寺の 苔に隠れし 祈り哉  mountain temple - a prayer overgrown with moss |
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Comments from friends:
hi gabi
i like the image you portray here, quite serene
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I like the ku and the associations, Gabi. ... 'overgrown' is good and literal in context of your photo, where the 'prayer' is most likely written rather than spoken or thought.
...'overtaken by moss' would be an alternative that would add a humorous note ..but perhaps only to those who share my sense of humour.
My goodness...someone has gone and crocheted a little hot pink beanie for that statue and popped a baby's bib on it, too! What an odd contrast.
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i like this haiku (and the photo) very much!
the haiku tells in a very interesting way about time (the present, the past, about lifetime, about history...)
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Hi, Gabi San, I loved the photo and the haiku -- "a prayer overgrown with moss", no matter how objective here, is also a great metaphor. "Overgrown" is not past tense, but passive (the moss does the action, not the prayer) and there's nothing wrong in using it.
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Gabi, nothing to say about your fine haiku, except "Well done."
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Delightful, Gabi!
I enjoyed the haiku, the photo, the info and the conversation...
an interesting thread!
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Gorgeous haiku, Gabi -
I really like how instructional you are with your haiku. I learn much by reading the links you provide - keep it up! Again, wonderful, visual haiku.
AHA
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MOSS as KIGO
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 good morning ! she nodds in the autumn sunshine  shadows in the flower heart - her outstreched arms  |
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 rather cold asters reach toward the morning sun  ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo dew on the petals |
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