Sunshine the whole day, but the days are getting shorter. In the early evening a cold wind takes over. We have to be early for our daily valley watch. And sometimes we have this pleasant surprise at the bottom ... autumn evening - the lingering warmth of this old deck chair |
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A friend has commented:
Nice one, Gabi.
Do you need the dash?
Good question, indeed I do.
Coming from a traditional Japanese haiku background, I am used to a kireji, a cut marker, which is visible in Japanese and a cherished ingredient in traditional haiku.
Right now, NHK is featuring a session of 24 lessons within two years about the CUT and the CUT MARKERS!
You might read more about it here
http://haikutopics.blogspot.com/2006/06/kireji.html
I try to keep the three requirements for a traditional Japanese haiku
5-7-5 (make this short long short in English)
one season word (kigo) and
one cut marker.
kire 切 means CUT
kireji 切字 means CUT MARKER
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5 comments:
Gabi
a wonderful and inviting haiku
Makes me feel ?the? need for a space on one of your chairs!
P.
such a wonderful haiku moment
passing Autumn
I like your haiku
etsuko
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/cherrypoetryclub/message/32132
simple... relaxing... I'm there..
BH
>Gabi
>I enjoyed this very much. I especially like the warmth of the "old" deck chair.
It adds a dimension of comfort and familiarity.
>A beautiful haiku to start my day.
>T.
Perfectly simple and multi-layered, too. Superb.
Best, B.
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