11/03/2007

deck chair

  
  


Sunshine the whole day,
but the days are getting shorter.
In the early evening a cold wind takes over.
We have to be early for our daily valley watch.

And sometimes we have this pleasant surprise
at the bottom ...




autumn evening -
the lingering warmth
of this old deck chair






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A friend has commented:

Nice one, Gabi.
Do you need the dash?

Good question, indeed I do.

Coming from a traditional Japanese haiku background, I am used to a kireji, a cut marker, which is visible in Japanese and a cherished ingredient in traditional haiku.
Right now, NHK is featuring a session of 24 lessons within two years about the CUT and the CUT MARKERS!


You might read more about it here
http://haikutopics.blogspot.com/2006/06/kireji.html



I try to keep the three requirements for a traditional Japanese haiku

5-7-5 (make this short long short in English)
one season word (kigo) and
one cut marker.

kire  切 means CUT
kireji  切字 means CUT MARKER




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5 comments:

Anonymous said...

Gabi

a wonderful and inviting haiku

Makes me feel ?the? need for a space on one of your chairs!

P.

Anonymous said...

such a wonderful haiku moment

passing Autumn

I like your haiku

etsuko
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/cherrypoetryclub/message/32132

Anonymous said...

simple... relaxing... I'm there..

BH

Anonymous said...

>Gabi
>I enjoyed this very much. I especially like the warmth of the "old" deck chair.
It adds a dimension of comfort and familiarity.
>A beautiful haiku to start my day.

>T.

Anonymous said...

Perfectly simple and multi-layered, too. Superb.

Best, B.

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