山寺の 苔に隠れし 祈り哉 mountain temple - a prayer overgrown with moss |
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Comments from friends:
hi gabi
i like the image you portray here, quite serene
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I like the ku and the associations, Gabi. ... 'overgrown' is good and literal in context of your photo, where the 'prayer' is most likely written rather than spoken or thought.
...'overtaken by moss' would be an alternative that would add a humorous note ..but perhaps only to those who share my sense of humour.
My goodness...someone has gone and crocheted a little hot pink beanie for that statue and popped a baby's bib on it, too! What an odd contrast.
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i like this haiku (and the photo) very much!
the haiku tells in a very interesting way about time (the present, the past, about lifetime, about history...)
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Hi, Gabi San, I loved the photo and the haiku -- "a prayer overgrown with moss", no matter how objective here, is also a great metaphor. "Overgrown" is not past tense, but passive (the moss does the action, not the prayer) and there's nothing wrong in using it.
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Gabi, nothing to say about your fine haiku, except "Well done."
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Delightful, Gabi!
I enjoyed the haiku, the photo, the info and the conversation...
an interesting thread!
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Gorgeous haiku, Gabi -
I really like how instructional you are with your haiku. I learn much by reading the links you provide - keep it up! Again, wonderful, visual haiku.
AHA
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