Incense

burning incense - the different smell of the last puff show me the secret of your smell - last puff of incense

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Incense, a topic for haiku !



Before you start worrying, the above poem is not a haiku (no kigo) and not a senryu (no irony or humour).
It is simply a zappai 雑俳 in my Japanese classification sceme.



KIGO HOTLINE
Incense, a topic for haiku ??? A discussion begins ...




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Haiku Hut

summer's end - a new beginning at Haiku Hut

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http://www.haikuhut.com/

http://www.michaelrehling.com/



I will dedicate this page to you, Mike san, it was inspired from comments in the HH!

END OF A SEASON and related KIGO !

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summer's end

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my summer's end
"you are going to need
a hearing aid"


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Haiku are best with a kigo, just one of them.

Season coming to an end many related kigo !



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Alzheimer

autumn with alzheimer - she breaks the bread .. ... .. carefully

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World Alzheimer's Day
September 21




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crows

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early morning -
the crows are discussing
ripe persimmons



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and they do that right on my rooftop!



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Furu Ike Ya

a hot pond - and then he jumps in, the naked human

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. my PHOTO ALBUM .


At a Hot Spring in Northern Japan, 20 years ago ...
It was destructed much later in an earthquake and has now been reconstructed, in a modern fashion ...



Some older Japanese reference



comment from a friend:
... your haiku demonstrates a good use of punctuation, something that's hard for me to know when to use in one.
Thanks.

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古池や蛙飛び込む水の音
furuike ya kawazu tobikomu mizu no oto

. mizu no oto 水の音 - discussion .



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Morning Fogg

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whiteout ... and then
the fogg dissolves
in pure sunshine




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The first view from my window was a pure white ... absolutely NOTHING to be seen !




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Cat on roof

summer's end - my cat still high on the hot tin roof

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She is trying to catch some of the crows which sit on the topmost gables.
This was the first time we saw her up there ... wondering about the way back down ... but she made it.




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Persimmon leaf

柿落葉　気温はまだ　三十二 kaki ochiba kion wa mada sanjuu ni fallen persimmon leaf - today's high is thirty two

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There has been a bit of discussion on the FALLEN LEAVES as kigo for all winter.


Why are fallen leaves a kigo for winter in Japan?


This photo was taken in September. Thirty two 32℃ ... I am used to the European way of expressing it in centigrade. It is summer when the temperature goes over 30℃. Other parts of Japan were even hotter that day !



Global warming, climate changes and related haiku topics

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some comments

HI Gabi,
I really like this juxtaposition with the references to global warning and your photo.

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Ah dear Gabi,
global warming has changed everything and it is good that you are noting that. Bravo!

'At thirty two' makes me think that it is your age, not the temperature. Maybe 'of thirty two'? Or put the temperature first?

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Gabi,
global warming may have us all revising our saijiki.

Thanks for all you do.

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autumn sunset

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autumn sunset - reflections in a broken bicycle mirror autumn sunset - a late butterfly hurries from flower to flower (Dedicated to an OLD friend, who is still chasing the girls ...)

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Firts version:

autumn sunset -
reflections in a broken
mirror


A friend suggested these first two lines

sunset
in a broken mirror


but this states something different from what I was trying to show the reader.


the general scene and mood is
............................. autumn sunset -

(I hope you can see the cut at the end of the line 1.) but then we have

reflections (of something xyz not stated ) in a broken
mirror


xyz could be ... my wrinkled face
(I make this up, it was not what I saw )


In my experience, XYZ was a raven hanging upside down over the almost ripe yellow rice fields. Someone must have broken a bicycle mirror or something by the roadside ...


That would be too much to tell in the haiku.
I wanted the reader to find out for him/herself what can be reflected in a broken mirror in his own life situation on an autumn evening ...


Still, I make it "bicycle mirror" to give you a lead ...

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More comments

nice moment to capture here ... i find the lines a little well used ..
I do like the moment you are reaching for

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Gabi, the first one is nice, but I LOVE your second one.

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Your second version is very nice haiku , Gabi san
I agree ,,, the "bicycle" added clarity and depth to the poem...

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autumn sunset -
reflections in a broken
bicycle mirror

maybe state simply:

pieces of mirror
reflect upside down --
a crow above ripe rice

Gabi san, I tried to put it all into that tight HAIKU sack...

pieces of mirror (imply a broken mirror)
reflect upside down -- (general characteristics of a reflection)
a crow above ripe rice (what you actually saw... ripening rice is too long so I fudged a little time with the kigo "ripe rice")


I see this from your explanation, but, the HAIKU may need or needs a tweak... probably less is more?

I left off "bicycle" as this is speculation... but that's just my take.

Also:

rippening rice -- (kigo)
a raven's image
in pieces of mirror

rippening rice --
an upside down raven
in a piece of mirror

Well... I could tweak more... but why have all the fun... LOVE this scene, Gabi san, reminds me of walking with Etsuko san at Gakurakuan along the country roadside in the afternoon... or was that morning?

keigu

.. Whow, Chibi san, you have been brainstorming !

I guess my story leads toward a haibun, to explain it all properly ... and then continues with the dead wild boar piglings (how do you call them in English? uribo) they hang them upside down too, one on each corner of the paddy, to hope the smell will scare other boars off from stealing the rice ... that is rural japan, before the advent of electric fencing ... and even with it, right here ...

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very interesting how you wrote the word longer!

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sea of clouds

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the sea of clouds
in the morning sun -
namu amida butsu




The first sea of clouds in the new autumn sunshine !



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feeling better

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feeling better -
a spider's web on the
blood pressure meter








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Typhoon Number Nine

強い台風9号

A typhoon moving towards Japan was forecast on Wednesday to hit a region near Tokyo later in the week and bring heavy rains and strong winds to the capital.

Typhoon Fitow, which means "beautiful fragrant flower" in a Micronesian language, was located about 600 km (375 miles) south of Tokyo and moving northwest at 15 kph (9.4 mph) as of 7am EDT on Wednesday, Japan's Meteorological Agency said.

Bringing with it winds gusting up to 126 kph (78 mph), the storm was forecast to approach the island of Hachijojima, about 300 km (190 miles) south of Tokyo, by Thursday morning, the agency said.


.. http://www.google.co.jp/TYPHOON

Ohaga ... Michi no Eki: TYPHOON SEASON 2007-

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dragonflies

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sunset -
a thousand dragonfly wings
over the paddies

They seem to have come out all at once !
The reflection of the late sunshine on all these wings is just fascinating !





dragonfly wings -
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Dragonfly (tombo, tonbo) Japan KIGO




an argument :

... not to use the numeral 'thousand', that would be untrue because you couldn't have counted them?!!

Well

We were sitting on the terrasse when the dragonflies suddenly showed up below us in the rice fields.

My husband said: "There must be a thousand!", So I added (an old joke of us):
"Why not count the wings and divide the number by four?"


Comments of some friends at HH.

Easy to visualize, Gabi, but I agree with xxx san on this one. (Only because I've received similar comments! )
You might want to find another way of showing the number, rather than counting them. Then again, this may simply be a haiku for your own 'memory bank' and be perfectly fine for the purpose!

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Love the image, Gabi san!
I did a bit of research...found a few cases where "a thousand" is used...perhaps it's accepted as a "round number"?

2 on this page: (in the "notebook" section)
http://www.asahi.com/english/haiku/070319.html


2nd place poem:
http://sakura.ua.edu/haiku_contest_winners_1998.htm

An interesting topic!

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i took the thousand to be the kind of exaggeration one uses in the moment ... wonder, disbelief, tautology ... and so on ...

i tend to use a million ...

i hesitated at the wings ... i thought to myself why not dragonflies ... why dragonfly wings ... but ... it does work !

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"Like" one-thousand.. . . . . . . . . . . .

works for me. BTW, english is a non-literal language sometimes, and also sometimes breaks its own "rules". re:

" haiku rules! "

versus

" haiku-rules"

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Hi Gabi,
I like both versions very much...the 'thousand' and the 'old love song'..lovely.

P.S. Hate to make you jealous, but I had no mosquitos this year up on the 6th floor in the city!

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Yes! Yes! Yes! What sparkling silences you tell !!

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Whether or not to use a thousand, a million or just say many, a lot ...
I prefer to use the numbers, a million stars in the sky ... even if it is quite a cliche. Something you can not count, well, you just can not count.

There is no special guideline in Japanese for this type of vocabulary use, as far as I am aware of.

We also have Ten thousand (man, ban 万) in Asia, an expression dating back to the Chinese T'ang Dynasty. It signifies a long time, usually eternity.
BANZAI 万歳, ten thousand years, is a common cheer　in Japan.

GABI

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Here are some more of my Dragonfly Haiku :
Vaughn Seward's haikuworkshop:
The Dragonfly Haiku Series


At www.wonderhaikuworlds.com


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Threatening Clouds

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threatening clouds
in the darkening sky -
and then this FLASH



Right in front of my nose, an unexpected lighning struck the bamboo grove on the other side of the valley, and an immediate thunder brought it all to vibrate in a hellish symphony



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