春めくや まだ見つからぬ 石の顔
signs of spring -
the face of a stone
not yet discovered
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I am looking at it for a long time ...
He is definitely smiling, I feel.
Trying to figure out whom this face resembles.
Do you know anyone?
signs of spring, haru meku 春めく a kigo
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some commentsWhat an interesting concept, Gabi!
The face does have a sense of familiarity...
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Hi Gabi san
Hmmm... wondering about the "not" which I think you and or Etusko san warned me against using in HAIKU... what about:
signs of spring:
I find the garden stone face
under the soil
The original may be walking a thin timeline here as this is two moments... uncovering the face and trying to remember.
Maybe it was Akegarasu sensei who warned me... sometimes it is difficult for me to remember as I got good advice from you all.
as I re-read I thought
signs of spring:
from under the garden soil
a stone face emerges
well... this still needs work and I have no idea yet how to fit it to the Japanese
I hope I helped remove the knot of not... hee hee
Well, what do you feel? Chibi
... Hi Chibi san, thanks for your kind thoughts.
It must have been Akegarasu giving you advise ...
two moments or just one ... that is a thin line indeed ..
I see the face clearly on my stone, I just do not remember whom it resembles ...
maybe YOUR face ?
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Memory and perception are not always easily divided.
The fusion of the two may be the essence of the moment.
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