| dark night ... a firefly flies over my roof two days later dark night ... three fireflies brighten my valley again two days later silent night ... the delicate shimmer of fireflies |
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At first I was tempted to write ... a silent night
to make sure it was not THE Silent Night ... spelled mostly with capital S and N.
It is like a Christmas present to see these thousands of fireflies in the remote valley in complete silence, up and down, back and forth ... and we can enjoy it for about two, three weeks if there is no rain at night ..
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Lovely Gabi!
K.I.
That must be a picture to see Gabi. Beautiful work.
B.
Something I have been seeing here, too, Gabi. Lovely.
Me.
Gabi san, this is great.
Ma.
That's lovely, Gabi. I remember them in Nepal.
Magical, they were.
friend
Beautiful, Gabi.
Some might be distracted by the Christmas ehoes of silent night (stille Nacht), just in case you'd consider that a problem.
B.B.
I first saw a Chrismas haiku coming up out of season, Gabi, so this is a lovely surprise.
Very nice.
S.C.
meteor shower --
some of them in the grass
near by us
Tom
I'm trying to imagine this, Gabi.
It must be wonderful to see.
Don't you just feel like wrapping yourself in a blanket and sleeping outside?
:.) E.
its a beautiful moment captured ... not sure the modifier is required ? a shimmer is nothing but delicate ? as are fireflies
... a silent night works very well for me ..
E.M.
Hello, Gabi san and Gina,
"delicate shimmer" does not seem redundant to me. "shimmer" does imply a faint light, but that's in the eye of the observer -- a powerful lighthouse beam appears to shimmer if one is far enough away, but it is not delicate. The meaning of "delicate" here seems to be not "weak" but "exquisitely fine" and "pleasing to the senses."
I vote for keeping it.
neko
wow Dear Gabi san
You can see firefles around your house
beautiful
Thank you very much
etsuko
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