Sea of clouds

sea of clouds - just looking out of my window autumn morning - the splendid silence of your smile

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My Road to India

road to India - hoping for sunshine at the other side

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WORLD HAIKU FESTIVAL in INDIA 2008


. . . . INDIA SAIJIKI . . . .




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autumn butterflies

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autumn butterflies -
a final dance from
light to shadow





光から陰へのダンス　秋の蝶



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It was amazing to see the two little yellow ones suddenly disappear, when a cloud covered the late autumn sun and the valley fell into deep darkness ... all of a sudden.

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................. DUTCH translation:


herfstvlinders -
een finale dans van
licht naar schaduw

Geert Verbeke


................. Scots translation:

hairst butteries -
a hinmaist jig frae
licht tae sheddae

John McDonald


................. Romanian translation:

fluturi in octombrie-
dansul final dintre
lumina si umbra

Vasile Moldovan


................. French Translation:

des papillons d'automne---
dans une dernière danse
la lumière devient ombre

Keith A. Simmonds



Thanks to all my friends from WonderHaikuWorlds for the translations !


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Some friends thought the use of FINAL was too much of a personification here, leading to the death of the butterflies ...

I used it to mean the final moment for myself,
when I could not see them any more, after watching them for about two minutes, they simply vanished in mid-air when the late sunshine stopped to fall on them and they were ... gone, invisible, it was final for me ...


If you extend the meaning of FINAL as seen of the life of the butterfly, this is a different way of interpretation
(I might have intended or not ;) ).


This is a scene I can only observe in late autumn sunshine and enjoy every year to the fullest !

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Issa and world fellows Display in Tokyo
Nakamura Sakuo Special Exhibition
February 2008



Butterflies (choochoo) KIGO

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Withered branches

Lesson about the CUT, cause and effect


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枯れ枝や　朝日に光る白い苔
kareeda ya asahi ni hikaru shiroi koke


withered branches -
their white moss sparkles
in the morning sun



朝の日や枯れ枝に光る白い苔
asa no hi ya kareeda ni hikaru shiroi koke

morning sunshine -
white moss sparkles
on withered branches




NO CUTTING WORD ... NO Japanese Equivalent
just for the sake of this exercise, using an inversion of line 2 and 3 which I do not favour in my haiku.


morning sunshine
on withered branches
the white moss sparkles


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We had long planned to cut this old three, whith its few bare branches sticking into the sky. But this morning, I decided to let him stand there as long as he was given time by nature ...



........................... a bit of Haiku theory

According to Hasegawa Kai sensei, the working of the cut is to bring out the relation between cause and effect. Cause is the happening NOW. Effect (something lingering in my mind plus CUT ) pops up.
BUT
in a good haiku, say what is still remaining in your heart first (with a CUTTING word). Meaning, the result, the effect is stated first, then the cause, the reason for what triggered this now.


I saw the white sparkle first, then the sunshine came into mind.

The third example has no Japanese equivalent.
The English reader might read a pause after line one or two, or maybe pivot ... theories are many.


Still struggeling with the CUT.
The lesson is going on till April of 2009, so there will be more theory !

Kireji, the CUT in haiku !




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Matz Bee

a stuffed pond - no space for the frog to jump in by Matz Bee

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Pondering about Matsuo Basho and many modern haiku !




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unkai

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雲海や一瞬だけの色使い


a second of pinky orange -
the sky above my
sea of clouds



just a second
of pink and orange -
this seas of clouds



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Philosophy

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The self is not something that one finds.
It is something that one creates.

-- Thomas Szasz (1920-)
American Psychiatrist


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for haiku, it is often the other way round for me:

A haiku is not something that one creates.
It is something that one finds.

How about your haiku creation process ?

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Dear Gabi San,
Thanks you much for your continuous help to create.

With due honour to the American psychiatrist I may say that according Indian philosophy, our belief, the divine like the tao is already present in us and outside us. We have to contact it to find ourselves. A way of thinking it may be, as the modernist may say. but it is like is-ness, am-ness.

Now the next about Haiku as you invite, I have just penned these three lines-

Everything is there;
you have to put them in the
right place to create.

Warmly-
© Aju Mukhopadhyay, India, 2007


MORE
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autumn sunshine -
I find the right spot
to sit down



Nice Gabi San, yours too.
I have kept a copy of it- haiku out of philosophic discussion.
Warmly,
Aju Mukhopadhyay

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More thoughts on philosophical haiku as opposed to pure shasei haiku

After doing a little cursory research, it seems that the term 'philosophical', when applied to haiku, is a catch-all term for haiku which: have for subject matter an idea or concept; draw a moral; present or hint at a religious belief system; incorporate metaphysical elements; etc.

Larry Bole has more HERE !

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earthworm

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nothing new -
a listless earthworm
in slow motion







ミミズ鳴く　日々の暮らしもさりげなく




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Dear Gabi San,
Seeing your earthworm just now, I have just penned a haiku for you to add another flavour.


If we do our work
silently like an earthworm
the earth will be blessed.


© Aju Mukhopadhyay, India, 2007


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EARTHWORM, mimizu ミミズ　蚯蚓　みみず
ミミズ鳴く, mimizu naku, a kigo



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ten takashi

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high autumn sky -
a late mosquito
at my feet


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Clear Autumn Sky (ten takashi, Japan)
... high autumn sky, spacious sky


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sleepless night

autumn downpoor - the new roof drums a new melody

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aki matsuri

秋祭り autumn festival - a streak of sunshine on the priest

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Considering most of the day was rainy, the priest picked the right moment to read his prayers.



Autumn Festival (aki matsuri, Japan)



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First Snow

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初雪のお知らせありて　冨士の山









first snow
late on Mount Fuji ...
says the news








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It is 5 days later than a "normal" year and 1 day earlier than last season.


First Snow ... a KIGO


Fuji, Mt. Fuji, Fujiyama, Fujisan and haiku





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nadeshiko

撫子や nadeshiko ya wild carnation - the fragile features of this old courtesan

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歌麿の幻の肉筆画「女達磨図」
喜多川歌麿（１７５３～１８０６年）
They found the original of this old courtesan/Daruma
painting by Kitagawa Utamaro !!



Oiran to Daruma 花魁と達磨　
Daruma and the Courtesans (geisha)


Carnation, Nelke ... Wild Carnation (nadeshiko)




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Badgers Narrow Road

獣道　　kemonomichi autumn of the badgers ... their narrow road to the deep forest

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Basho / Oku no Hosomichi ... 2007



kemonomichi, the footpath of wild animals in our area ... this year, the badgers crossed the road from the forest to the field below, and left their dirty footprints all over the asphalt too after a night of rain.




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sun rays

sunrays cutting through the morning mist - spiders over graves sunrays cutting through the morning mist - no place for JUX

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JUX, or JUXT, an abbreviation often used for juxtaposition, an ingredient for haiku, especially loved by my American friends ...

For my German ear, JUX is something else .. or maybe not ? ??



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