Lesson about the CUT, cause and effect
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枯れ枝や 朝日に光る白い苔
kareeda ya asahi ni hikaru shiroi koke
withered branches -
their white moss sparkles
in the morning sun
朝の日や枯れ枝に光る白い苔
asa no hi ya kareeda ni hikaru shiroi koke
morning sunshine -
white moss sparkles
on withered branches
NO CUTTING WORD ... NO Japanese Equivalent
just for the sake of this exercise, using an inversion of line 2 and 3 which I do not favour in my haiku.
morning sunshine
on withered branches
the white moss sparkles
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We had long planned to cut this old three, whith its few bare branches sticking into the sky. But this morning, I decided to let him stand there as long as he was given time by nature ...
........................... a bit of Haiku theory
According to Hasegawa Kai sensei, the working of the cut is to bring out the relation between cause and effect. Cause is the happening NOW. Effect (something lingering in my mind plus CUT ) pops up.
BUT
in a good haiku, say what is still remaining in your heart first (with a CUTTING word). Meaning, the result, the effect is stated first, then the cause, the reason for what triggered this now.
I saw the white sparkle first, then the sunshine came into mind.
The third example has no Japanese equivalent.
The English reader might read a pause after line one or two, or maybe pivot ... theories are many.
Still struggeling with the CUT.
The lesson is going on till April of 2009, so there will be more theory !
Kireji, the CUT in haiku !
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10/17/2007
Matz Bee
| a stuffed pond - no space for the frog to jump in by Matz Bee |
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Pondering about Matsuo Basho and many modern haiku !
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unkai
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雲海や一瞬だけの色使い
a second of pinky orange -
the sky above my
sea of clouds
just a second
of pink and orange -
this seas of clouds
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雲海や一瞬だけの色使い
a second of pinky orange -
the sky above my
sea of clouds
just a second
of pink and orange -
this seas of clouds
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10/15/2007
Philosophy
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The self is not something that one finds.
It is something that one creates.
-- Thomas Szasz (1920-)
American Psychiatrist
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for haiku, it is often the other way round for me:
A haiku is not something that one creates.
It is something that one finds.
How about your haiku creation process ?
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Dear Gabi San,
Thanks you much for your continuous help to create.
With due honour to the American psychiatrist I may say that according Indian philosophy, our belief, the divine like the tao is already present in us and outside us. We have to contact it to find ourselves. A way of thinking it may be, as the modernist may say. but it is like is-ness, am-ness.
Now the next about Haiku as you invite, I have just penned these three lines-
Everything is there;
you have to put them in the
right place to create.
Warmly-
© Aju Mukhopadhyay, India, 2007
MORE
..... Philosophical Haiku ... from India
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autumn sunshine -
I find the right spot
to sit down
Nice Gabi San, yours too.
I have kept a copy of it- haiku out of philosophic discussion.
Warmly,
Aju Mukhopadhyay
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More thoughts on philosophical haiku as opposed to pure shasei haiku
After doing a little cursory research, it seems that the term 'philosophical', when applied to haiku, is a catch-all term for haiku which: have for subject matter an idea or concept; draw a moral; present or hint at a religious belief system; incorporate metaphysical elements; etc.
Larry Bole has more HERE !
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More quotes with HAIKU !
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The self is not something that one finds.
It is something that one creates.
-- Thomas Szasz (1920-)
American Psychiatrist
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for haiku, it is often the other way round for me:
A haiku is not something that one creates.
It is something that one finds.
How about your haiku creation process ?
............................
Dear Gabi San,
Thanks you much for your continuous help to create.
With due honour to the American psychiatrist I may say that according Indian philosophy, our belief, the divine like the tao is already present in us and outside us. We have to contact it to find ourselves. A way of thinking it may be, as the modernist may say. but it is like is-ness, am-ness.
Now the next about Haiku as you invite, I have just penned these three lines-
Everything is there;
you have to put them in the
right place to create.
Warmly-
© Aju Mukhopadhyay, India, 2007
MORE
..... Philosophical Haiku ... from India
.............................................. Here is my answer
autumn sunshine -
I find the right spot
to sit down
Nice Gabi San, yours too.
I have kept a copy of it- haiku out of philosophic discussion.
Warmly,
Aju Mukhopadhyay
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More thoughts on philosophical haiku as opposed to pure shasei haiku
After doing a little cursory research, it seems that the term 'philosophical', when applied to haiku, is a catch-all term for haiku which: have for subject matter an idea or concept; draw a moral; present or hint at a religious belief system; incorporate metaphysical elements; etc.
Larry Bole has more HERE !
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10/13/2007
earthworm
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nothing new -
a listless earthworm
in slow motion
ミミズ鳴く 日々の暮らしもさりげなく
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Dear Gabi San,
Seeing your earthworm just now, I have just penned a haiku for you to add another flavour.
If we do our work
silently like an earthworm
the earth will be blessed.
© Aju Mukhopadhyay, India, 2007
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EARTHWORM, mimizu ミミズ 蚯蚓 みみず
ミミズ鳴く, mimizu naku, a kigo
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nothing new -
a listless earthworm
in slow motion
ミミズ鳴く 日々の暮らしもさりげなく
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Dear Gabi San,
Seeing your earthworm just now, I have just penned a haiku for you to add another flavour.
If we do our work
silently like an earthworm
the earth will be blessed.
© Aju Mukhopadhyay, India, 2007
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EARTHWORM, mimizu ミミズ 蚯蚓 みみず
ミミズ鳴く, mimizu naku, a kigo
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10/10/2007
ten takashi
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high autumn sky -
a late mosquito
at my feet
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Clear Autumn Sky (ten takashi, Japan)
... high autumn sky, spacious sky
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high autumn sky -
a late mosquito
at my feet
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Clear Autumn Sky (ten takashi, Japan)
... high autumn sky, spacious sky
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10/09/2007
sleepless night
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More haiku about my
ROOF !
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10/08/2007
aki matsuri
| 秋祭り autumn festival - a streak of sunshine on the priest   |
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Considering most of the day was rainy, the priest picked the right moment to read his prayers.
Autumn Festival (aki matsuri, Japan)
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10/06/2007
First Snow
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初雪のお知らせありて 冨士の山
first snow
late on Mount Fuji ...
says the news
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It is 5 days later than a "normal" year and 1 day earlier than last season.
First Snow ... a KIGO
Fuji, Mt. Fuji, Fujiyama, Fujisan and haiku
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初雪のお知らせありて 冨士の山
first snow
late on Mount Fuji ...
says the news
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It is 5 days later than a "normal" year and 1 day earlier than last season.
First Snow ... a KIGO
Fuji, Mt. Fuji, Fujiyama, Fujisan and haiku
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nadeshiko
| 撫子や nadeshiko ya  wild carnation - the fragile features of this old courtesan  |
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歌麿の幻の肉筆画「女達磨図」
喜多川歌麿（１７５３～１８０６年）
They found the original of this old courtesan/Daruma
painting by Kitagawa Utamaro !!
Oiran to Daruma 花魁と達磨
Daruma and the Courtesans (geisha)
Carnation, Nelke ... Wild Carnation (nadeshiko)
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Badgers Narrow Road
| 獣道 kemonomichi  autumn of the badgers ... their narrow road to the deep forest  |
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Basho / Oku no Hosomichi ... 2007
kemonomichi, the footpath of wild animals in our area ... this year, the badgers crossed the road from the forest to the field below, and left their dirty footprints all over the asphalt too after a night of rain.
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sun rays
| sunrays cutting through the morning mist - spiders over graves  sunrays cutting through the morning mist - no place for JUX  |
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JUX, or JUXT, an abbreviation often used for juxtaposition, an ingredient for haiku, especially loved by my American friends ...
For my German ear, JUX is something else .. or maybe not ? ??
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10/05/2007
visitors
Ryokan sweeping fallen leaves
waiting for guests ...
I sweep the path again
and again
. Ryokan san and Tamashima Daruma
. Ryokan Memorial Day
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Sweeping the mental path, polishing the dustless mirror ... the daily zen activities ...
And with the autumn leaves now falling, sweeping is a real activity. Checking for the most beautiful to entertain the visitors, sweeping, bowing down, looking at autumn colors, sweeping a bit more.
When all is clean, turn around, just to see another leaf fallen on the path ...
Ryokan with his broom ... my good friend ! Click on the little photo above.
sweeping the leaves
with a broom like old Jittoku -
again and again
Fallen Leaves and Jittoku
Kanzan and Jittoku 寒山拾得
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Zen Patriarch Xiangyen Zhixian experiences enlightenment while sweeping
Kanō Motonobu 狩野元信 Kano Motonobu (1476–1559)
kyoogen kyakuchiku 香巌撃竹
Kyōgen Chikan 香嚴智閑
© More in the WIKIPEDIA !
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. . hatsubooki 初箒（はつぼうき）first (use of the) broom .
hakizome 掃初 (はきぞめ) first cleaning
... fukihajime 拭始（ふきはじめ）beginning to clean
... hatsusooji 初掃除（はつそうじ）
kigo for the New Year
. WKD - Ryokan Memorial Day .
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. hooki 箒 / ほうき Hoki, broom, Besen .
hookishi 箒師 making brooms in Edo
hookiya 箒屋 vendor of brooms
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Daishizen
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Nature is great 大自然 daishizen
namu amida
sunshine is my friend
drought is my friend
nature is great
rain is my friend
typhoon is my friend
namu amida
life is my friend
death is my friend
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Nature is great 大自然 daishizen
namu amida
sunshine is my friend
drought is my friend
nature is great
rain is my friend
typhoon is my friend
namu amida
life is my friend
death is my friend
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10/04/2007
Higanbana
 higanbana - finally you show your beautiful face  HIGANBANA flowers for the autumn equinox this year they are more than two weeks later than usual. The ricefields, where they present a beautiful red frame to the yellow fields, are already cut and brown.  |
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Spider Lilies, cluster amaryllis (higanbana, manjushage) KIGO
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